One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think advantages are outweigh the disadvantages.

These days
people
are living a long age healthy
life
due to huge changes in
medical
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the medical

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field. I support
to
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apply

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this
statement
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to

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the
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a

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large extent. My position is argued
further
with
explanation
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the explanation

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. Health
play
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an essential role in human
life
. In
this
competitive era, medical care is developing day by day.
Government
spend
lot
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a lot

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of funds on medical care and research of new medicines. There are several advantages of it.
Firstly
, nowadays in all around world medical field has modern and high-tech
machineries
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machinery
types of machinery
pieces of machinery

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for
fight
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the fight
a fight

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against all type of
disease
such
as
,
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all types of cancer, stroke and infections.
Secondly
,
Government
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the Government

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more focusing
of
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on

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that type of
disease
which
are
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is

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spreading
with
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huge
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a huge

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speed in
people
. Scientists
are
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also give

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also
give their best to find
vaccine
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a vaccine

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for that type of illness so as much as possible they can wipe
disease
also
Government
has become
success
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a success

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to find
vaccine
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a vaccine

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for some
disease
which are more dangerous. For exemplify, 10
year
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years

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ago,
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the polio

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polio virus
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poliovirus

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was spread in India because of that there
are
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number
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a number
the number

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of
people
were dead but because of the vaccine of
it
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,it

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they were
success
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to wipe it in only 6 months.
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, it would not look
other
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another

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side too.
To begin
with
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,with

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life
expectancy is increasing but
opposite
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on opposite

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side there
are
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number
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a number
the number

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of
nation
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the nation
a nation

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are surviving with poverty.
People
live
long
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a long

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life
that means they refuse to
retirement
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retire

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from their duties and due to
this
reason youngster could not find job or income sources. Youngsters become unemployed because old
people
have
hold
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their position.
Government
and family should support old
people
and give them huge money to spend their old age.
Thus
to conclude the discussion, it can be
finally
said that
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and
medical
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field doing their best for nationality. I believe that old aged
people
should take retirement after some age of their work
life
and for
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them
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Government
should provide sufficient facilities.
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