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Prison is the common way in most countries to solve the problem of crime. However, a more effective solution is to provide people with a better education. Do you agree or disagree?

#prison #countries #crime #people #education
The bar chart illustrates the necessities of adults in selecting a particular course.
Also
,the pie chart shows how the amount of expenditure on education is shared between individuals,taxpayers and employers. Overall,interest in the subject is the major reason to select field of study and about forty per
cent
 of
total
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 fee has to be paid by individuals. Thirty-eight per
cent
 of adolescents want to gain qualification.22 per
cent
 of people are aiming to attain a job through the field of study whereas twenty per
cent
 of students wish to improve prospects of promotion and they enjoy learning.Twelve per
cent
 of the aspirants want to change their current job. Thirty-five per
cent
 of total finance for academics is contributed by the employers. Among the students ,nine per
cent
 of them start education just for meeting new people.
In addition
 to that.25 per
cent
 of the amount of cash is taken care of by the taxpayers.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tackles root causes
  • preventative approach
  • critical thinking
  • decision-making skills
  • recidivism rates
  • equipping
  • socio-economic benefits
  • underlying factors
  • poverty
  • ignorance
  • lack of opportunities
  • rehabilitation
  • ineffective
  • higher rates of re-offending
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