Some people believe the purpose of education should be helping the individual to become useful for society, while others believe it should help individuals to achieve their ambitions. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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is a primary need and a right of every individual, even though they may have different objectives of
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. Some think
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degree can help
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society in a good way, whilst others believe that it helps people to obtain their dreams. I completely agree with these two statements and will explain in
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paragraphs. On the one hand, the purpose of
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is not only about money and
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, but
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is a part of support to those who need it.
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can be a social changer for those who utilize it as a way of
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to the community.
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, some university students in Indonesia spend their one semester living in small villages in Indonesia to create a social project
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the local villagers and to help the locals using their knowledge to improve local villagers’ live. That’s why
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can be beneficial for society and
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community.
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, it is not a mistake if one’s purpose in getting
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education
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is to achieve their ambitions in
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or in
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. Some need higher
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to be promoted to a higher
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in a company or an organization.
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, a civil servant in Indonesia cannot be promoted to
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higher
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level if they do not continue their study to
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a postgraduate
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degree.
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, it is popular that individual with high
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earn
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more money. They are likely easy to place in a good
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in a good company with an outstanding
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background. To sum up,
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we need
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to be beneficial to
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society, have
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to achieve ambition is not a wrong idea.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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