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Nowadays animal experiments are widely used to develop new medicines and to test the safety of other products. Some people argue that these experiments should be banned because it is morally wrong to cause animals to suffer, while others are in favor of them because of their benefits to humanity. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Pharmaceutical companies are still using living creatures to
test
 the safety of their
products
. Some people believe
this
practice
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practise
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 should be stopped, while others think we should continue with the same practice because it will benefit humanity.
This
 essay will explore both sides as well as why I believe we should consider alternative methods. It is crucial for pharmaceutical
products
 to get tested before approved to be used in human. The only reliable method of testing the safety of any
products
 is to
test
 it on animals. If we omit
this
 step, the chance of harmful
products
 affecting people's health is high.
For instance
, vaccines should be
first
 be tested on animals before approved to be given to a human.
Thus
, animal experimentation is paramount to prevent unsafe product released in the market.
On the other hand
, it is cruel to
test
 unsafe
products
 on other creatures as well. They have feelings and sensation similar to human.
Besides
, it is against their rights to be caged in the lab and be tested with lots of chemical
products
 their entire lives.
For instance
, according to 'Today Science" magazine, millions of mice are being killed every year in the process of testing human
products
 in one of the labs.
Hence
, animal experimentation is unfair and cruel to any creatures. It is my belief that other methods should be used to
test
 the safety of a product as opposed to using animals. One of
this
 method is through biotechnology, by testing
products
 on human cells that are artificially cultured in the lab. which means basically providing the same environment as the body
instead
 of another living being. By doing
this
 we can save the animal from being tortured in the labs. In conclusion, there are two opposing views regarding the use of animal in experimental labs. I advocate and support the ones that believe
this
practise
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 should be banned.
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