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Government in many countries have recently introduced special taxes on food and beverages with high level of sugar some think that these taxes are a good idea while other disagree. Discuss both you and give your opinion?

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Food
 plays a predominant role as far as survival and living is concerned. Imposing high
taxes
 by government on
food
 and drink which contains more sugar content is encouraged by some ,Meanwhile, others refute and oppose the idea of leving
taxes
 .
This
 essay highlights both opinion along with my viewpoint.
To begin
 with, keeping into concern the quantity of the artificial synthesis used in the drinks and
food
, is the reason by some to be in favour of applying the special
taxes
. Since individual seems careless to read about in ingredient of the product and how much nutrition value it contains, in that case ,strategy of increasing the cost of products prove beneficial to refrain customer buying it.
Consequently
 ,improved eating habits and lesser to many fatal ailments :high BP, diabetes. On contrary ,affordability is another major factor which lead people set of people to refute the above statement. Though adding much value to the product decreases the usability but unnecessarily increase the cost of purchase. In underdeveloped countries ,more population is of economy class where they have to work hard for basic necessities of life:
food
 ,clothing ,shelter in that case ,if more
taxes
 are applied to they would be deprived or starve because of
food
.
As a result
 mortality rate increased vice versa to economies of scale. According to my perspective, certain slab should be maintained which vary from country to country. Daily consumable foods: pulses ,vegetables should be economical to be purchased by all ,on contrary ,pizza ,burger ,alcohol should be charged high .
This
 balanced approach lead individuals to have wholesome foods without price constraint. In conclusion,
although
,Increased price would refrain masses from buying but not the only solution to the problem, as may result in adverse effect of human well-being.
However
 charging the product ,according to the consumption would mitigate the risk both on the part of individual as well as government.
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