You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practise in the community hall. You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall. Write a letter to the manager. In the letter: describe what the group doesexplain why the group is good for the communitysuggest alternative days and times for practice

Dear Sir, I am writing
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letter to inform you about the cancellation of the
music
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practice
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schedule in the community hall
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the request to provide a new timetable for rehearsals. I am living in
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St. Peter
Society
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, and my
music
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band including various members of our
society
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were practising for the
music
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in the community hall every Tuesday and Friday from 05:00 pm - 08:00 pm.
Music
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is a significant form of art which
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helps
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to express messages or thoughts to aware societies.
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, create a sense of community spirit, and
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engagement. But I received a letter yesterday informing me our schedule has been cancelled because art classes are going to start there.
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, I did not receive any other scheduled time for
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. As you know next month, there is a Talent Hunt program organised in our city, and the winning team will get a cash prize of $25,000 as a donation to their
society
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. Understandable, that art
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is
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required to earn more rewards for our
society
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, still
music
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practice
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is
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important as a big prize is linked to it. We are left with only 15 days before the competition, and I confirmed with the Secretary that Wednesday and Saturday afternoon slots are free. It can work for us, You can provide us with 12:00pm - 3:00 pm Wednesday and Saturday schedule. Looking for your response at the earliest possible time. Yours Faithfully, Kanwalpreet

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coherence and cohesion
Consider adding a brief introduction that outlines the purpose of your letter more clearly before diving into details.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus and that all points are relevant to the letter's purpose, to improve the development of single ideas.
task achievement
While your tone is generally suitable, a slightly more formal tone could enhance your request and convey professionalism.
task achievement
You have effectively identified the impact of music practice on community spirit and engagement, which strengthens your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter maintains a clear structure with a greeting and closing, which is commendable for effective communication.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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