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Whoever controls the media also controls opinions and attitudes of the people and there is little can be done to rectify this.

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It is undeniable that publishing is one of the best and easiest ways to spread the word, especially using the Internet that makes all of the communication easier and faster than before. So people are heavily influenced by the
news
 on social television. From my point of view, I personally agree with
this
 viewpoint for many reasons, described in the following paragraphs
To begin
 with, in many countries governments use the
news
 to their own advantage and to manipulate attitudes and opinions. For ,example in North ,Korea people are strictly limited from exposure to other media except for
news
 and information from the North Korean government so that
this
 particular government regime can maintain control over the will of its population. Very few people, if any, can seek the truth given that everything in the country not controlled by the government is blocked or at least severely censured.
Likewise
, some democratic countries
also
 face the same problem, not only in the political sector but
also
 in normal commercial activity and in social publishing. There are many unethical business groups or political parties in each country that use social radio like Facebook, IG (Instagram) or Tiktok to promote their business and at the same time retrieve consumer information
that is
 often archived in databases in order to analyze data and eventually pedal to
third
 parties for a profit. Much of
this
 data can be used to manipulate the crowd as we continue to see in America with Donald Trump selling “The Big Lie”, who was banned from Facebook and Twitter for
this
 very reason. In conclusion, community have been influenced anywhere and everywhere by the
news
 for years with no sign of it letting up. In the era of globalization, politicians, the wealthy and those with hidden agendas pose a great risk of undue influence. But the good
news
 is that careful scrutiny of media content and independent thought can serve as an effective counter to undue radio influence.
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