Some people believe that elderly parents ought to live at senior homes. Other believe that they should live with family members. Do you agree or disagree?

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old age homes while others believe that they should stay

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statement the senior citizen person should stay with their own family rather than staying at old

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with, the senior citizens have a rights to live with their own family because they have

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and mothers when they are getting sixty age meanwhile the children do not send to old age

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instead

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senior citizens must need love rather than anything when they are elderly. If

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elderly man

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senior homes, they will feel lonely and stress meanwhile their health might be affected drastically.

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, the above sixty

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along with their

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, they should live their remaining life at their own house with family members because they had worked for long years for their family.

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, according to the survey said that more than 75% of

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happily and healthily. To conclude, in

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modern era, most folks are working parents

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, they do not focus on their senior folks while they prefer to send at rest

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whereas most

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would like to keep to their parents at

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the over sixty

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should live at

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instead

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of rest

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because they will be happy when they are living at their family members.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

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4 paragraphs

334 words

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