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Everyone should adopt a vegetarian diet because eating meat can cause serious health problems. Do you agree or disagree?

#diet #meat #health
Some individuals believe that people should consume
vegetables
instead
 of
meat
 on account of eating
meat
 can cause severe health issues.
However
,
meat
 is known as a huge part of the human's
food
 chain as well as
vegetables
;
thus
, do you think that people have to stop consuming
meat
?
Firstly
, I had better note that eating
meat
 can lead to health issues for a healthy human only when it consumed in large quantities;
for example
, consumption of
meat
 in excessive amounts can lead to some illnesses
such
 as gout.
Therefore
, people can eat
meat
 as their meals if they follow a healthy
food
 schedule;
in other words
, they should avoid consuming
meat
 in enormous amounts.
In addition
,
vegetables
 contain a considerable amount of nutrients that are necessary for human's organs but in my view, they cannot replace
meat
 from the human's
food
 network because of some nutrients that
meat
 contains;
for instance
, there are certain protein filaments in
meat
 which can't be found in
vegetables
.
Hence
, our
food
 schedule must include a combination of consuming
meat
 in an appropriate amount and eating
vegetables
 in adequate quantities.
On the other hand
, imagine that we erased
meat
 from the human's
food
 chain and put
vegetables
 as a substitute ,certainly, we will create some problems in other
food
 chains in nature because these
food
 chains,
besides
 the human's
food
 chain, had a long way to be developed and they are not developed in just a few years. To summarize, in my opinion,
meat
 is an irreplaceable part of the human's
food
 schedule as well as
vegetables
;
moreover
, we have to put some limits on consuming
meat
 to prevent possible health problems in the future.
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