Nowadays technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing (for example, through cell phone tracking and security cameras) In many cases, the people being monitored are unaware that this is happening. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
Techonology
is flourishing by leaps and bounds in every field especially Correct your spelling
Technology
detective
sector. Correct article usage
the detective
However
, a fair amount of people think that today technology
use
to supervise Change the verb form
uses
to
the Change preposition
apply
surroundings
area Replace the word
surrounding
such
as mobile tracking, CCTV camera
while others think that the people being supervised are unaware incidents
. I think Change preposition
of incidents
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this improvement
these improvements
has
more merits outweigh the demerits.
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To begin
with, there are many reasons for this
improvements has more benefits to the society. Nowadays police department Correct determiner usage
these
get
more benefit from Change the verb form
gets
this
type of moniter
because they can easily find the Correct your spelling
monitor
crime
person through the technology
as a result
the culprit immediatly
will get punishment. To more precise the folks are able to live without any troubles Correct your spelling
immediately
such
as thieft
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theft
this
means all streets and homes are fully moniter
to the cops by CCTV Correct your spelling
monitor
camera
meanwhile any stranger will come to the
any street the cops are Remove the article
apply
careully
watch their activities because might be done any Correct your spelling
carefully
crime
therefore
, they can protect before doing any misleading action. In other Add the comma(s)
,therefore
many
cases the detective might be found the captives by mobile tracking Correct quantifier usage
apply
technology
in other words
they get clear information about the culprit such
as where they stay and what is the next
plan as a result
, the detective might be avoided before happens. For example
, the world most dangerous and mistery
cases Correct your spelling
mystery
has
solved by using Change the verb form
have
technology
.
On the other hand
, this
development has some drawbacks such
as the technical skill captives know about everything this
means the police how to track them by cell phone therefore
, they will do very cleverly and sometimes they have to lock another person for them misleading action. To be more precise the most puplic
places are covered by CCTV cameras meanwhile the prison might be erased all the video footage and hide Correct your spelling
public
to
the Correct pronoun usage
it to
camera
before attack any action as a result
, the folks protecter
would be confused Correct your spelling
protector
who
did Change preposition
about who
this
incident. For instance
, many banks are installing camera
to their ATM Add an article
a camera
center
for Change the spelling
centre
avoid
any Change the verb form
avoiding
thieft
whereas we can see many culprits has done Correct your spelling
theft
crime
how they will cover Change the pronoun
their
them
face by cloth or mask.
To conclude, in Correct your spelling
the
this
modern era, all sector work has done very quckily
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quickly
wihtout
take too much of time in the same the Correct your spelling
without
crime
cases are solved through the Replace the word
criminal
technology
and we can live safety and happy life. I hope this
is a positive breakthroughs
compared to ever before Change the noun form
breakthrough
therefore
, this
kinds of Correct determiner usage
these
advancemets
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advancements
advancement
has
more merits outweigh the demerits.Change the verb form
have
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