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You recently attended a training course for your work. Your employer has asked you for your feedback on the training course. Write a letter to your employer In your letter • remind your employer what the course was about • explain why the course was useful to you in your work • suggest why the course may not be suitable for some of your other colleagues

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Dear Mr Johnson, I am writing to you to express my gratitude for the course "Designing Software Architecture" which I completed 2 months ago with my team. As was decided by our technical director, many teams from our company were enrolled on
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 course to improve
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 knowledge about designing software applications and to learn about the best practices, which are used in the leading software companies nowadays. Since the content of the course was completely relevant and requested, our team has started to integrate new approaches from the beginning of
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 month. The results are inspiring. Following the guides learnt from the coaches, we have significantly increased our
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 performance and stability.
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, I would like to share
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 thoughts about
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 training
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 to less experienced colleagues. It might be not suitable for them, because it requires
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proficiency in some areas of computer science, which they might not have yet. Yours faithfully, Vlad
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While your letter effectively covers all points, providing a specific example of how you applied what you learned could enhance clarity.
coherence cohesion
Consider using linking words and connectors to strengthen the logical flow between ideas.
coherence cohesion
The letter is well-structured with a clear opening and closing.
task achievement
The writing tone is polite and suits the formal nature of the letter.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Training program
  • Skill enhancement
  • Job responsibilities
  • Practical exercises
  • Hands-on experience
  • Operational efficiency
  • Subject matter
  • Prerequisites
  • Specialized knowledge
  • Teaching methodology
  • Learning preferences
  • Feedback
  • Course facilitator
  • Professional development
  • Engagement
  • Interactive components
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