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The international community must act immediately to ensure all nations to reduce their consumption of fossil fuels e.g. gas and oil.do you agree or disagree.?

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Does
use
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the use
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 of
non renewable
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non-renewable
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energy
 sources
has
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 perilous effects on climate?It is often debatable that, all countries should consider the harmful consequences of
use
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the use
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 of fossil
fuels
 and
thus
 decrease their consumption urgently in order to save the planet earth. I completely agree with
this
 notion and the same shall be discussed
further
 in
this
 essay.
Firstly
, fossil
fuels
 emit dangerous substances
in to
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 the environment like sulphur dioxide and carbon dioxide which are not only detrimental to nature but
also
 to public health. Since,these particulates cause air ,soil and water pollution.
For example
- due to
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greenhouse
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green house
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greenhouse
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 gases there is a depletion of
ozone
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the ozone
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 layer which is protective for our skin and lack of it causes skin cancers and allergies.
Moreover
, sulphur dioxide causes acid rain which is toxic to plants and aquatic animals.
Hence
, there is a danger of global warming across the world which is a universal concern due to various effects on
environment
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the environment
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such
 as, drought, floods, rise in sea levels etc.
Secondly
, crude oils
such
 as petroleum,gas and coal are limited as they take years for their production.
Therefore
,
non renewable
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non-renewable
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energy
 sources are expensive.
furthermore
,
there
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their
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 unlimited
use
 in modern civilisation in various sectors can deplete them and
may be
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maybe
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 no longer left for future generations.
For instance
, in a study by global
peace
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,peace
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 there is a report of
increase
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an increase
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 in consumption of coal and petroleum to almost 30
percent
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per cent
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 every year throughout the world due to
expansion
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the expansion
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 of industrialisation. Henceforth, renewable
energy
 sources like geothermal ,solar
energy
 and wind
energy
 should be utilized . In conclusion, I believe efforts of all nation to decrease the
use
 of fossil
fuels
 should be done jointly so that mother nature can be a better place to live
healthy
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healthily
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 and
pollution free
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pollution-free
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 for all the living beings on earth.
Nevertheless
, future generation can
also
 have the benefit of fossil
fuels
use
 limitedly.
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