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The international community must act immediately to ensure all nations to reduce their consumption of fossil fuels e.g. gas and oil.do you agree or disagree.?

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 of
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energy
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 perilous effects on climate?It is often debatable that, all countries should consider the harmful consequences of
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the use
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 of fossil
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 decrease their consumption urgently in order to save the planet earth. I completely agree with
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 notion and the same shall be discussed
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 essay.
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, fossil
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 emit dangerous substances
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 the environment like sulphur dioxide and carbon dioxide which are not only detrimental to nature but
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 to public health. Since,these particulates cause air ,soil and water pollution.
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- due to
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greenhouse
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green house
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greenhouse
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 gases there is a depletion of
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the ozone
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 layer which is protective for our skin and lack of it causes skin cancers and allergies.
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, sulphur dioxide causes acid rain which is toxic to plants and aquatic animals.
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, there is a danger of global warming across the world which is a universal concern due to various effects on
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such
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 as, drought, floods, rise in sea levels etc.
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, crude oils
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 as petroleum,gas and coal are limited as they take years for their production.
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,
non renewable
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energy
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 sources are expensive.
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 unlimited
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 in modern civilisation in various sectors can deplete them and
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 no longer left for future generations.
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, in a study by global
peace
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 there is a report of
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an increase
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 in consumption of coal and petroleum to almost 30
percent
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 every year throughout the world due to
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the expansion
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 of industrialisation. Henceforth, renewable
energy
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 sources like geothermal ,solar
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 and wind
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 should be utilized . In conclusion, I believe efforts of all nation to decrease the
use
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 of fossil
fuels
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 should be done jointly so that mother nature can be a better place to live
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 and
pollution free
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 for all the living beings on earth.
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, future generation can
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 have the benefit of fossil
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use
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 limitedly.
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