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Every culture, throughout time, has recorded its history in one way or another. In what ways can history be passed on to the next generation? Why is the history important to society?

#culture #time #history #generation #society
Throughout decades, nationalities have created and wrote down
its
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history
 as
an evidence
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evidence
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 its existence and activities. As we know It has been transferred
a
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 lot of ways
such
 as talks, engraving, parchment and
books
, but in
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last
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past
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 centuries the most common and convenient way is considered
books
. To be more educated it is essential for each society to save and learn its
history
.
The
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history
 can be passed to
next
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 offspring
by
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in
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 many ways, but in my opinion,
books
 are
more
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 acceptable and common way.
Books
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 not
long-lasting
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 feature which is important to save information, but
also
 it is
acceptable
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 and comfortable way for people to get information.
Books
 are easy to keep and share,
moreover
it
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they
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 can contain many historical illustrations from different
centauries
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centuries
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. As
the
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matter
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if
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of
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the
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fact, in each country we can see
books
 museums where most
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books
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the books
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 are considered
history
. To have
educated
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 and developed society it is important to learn
history
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the history
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 which will allow
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to keep
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 your identity. So, at school children are taught their national and other countries’
history
 to develop their worldview. At the same time in some
cases
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 it is prevented to make the same mistakes that were done by our ancestors․
For example
,
last
 year in Armenia was done interpellation which found out the opinion about
importance
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the importance
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 of
history
 and ninety
percent
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 of views are thought it is essential the knowledge of
history
 for everyone.
Accordingly
, each nationality tries to keep and pass its
history
 and culture to offspring as it is considered
national
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the national
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wealthy
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 of any country.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • oral traditions
  • storytelling
  • preserving
  • manuscripts
  • cultural artifacts
  • conserving
  • curriculum
  • contemporary
  • documentaries
  • commemorate
  • cultural consciousness
  • genealogy
  • ancestry
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