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Every culture, throughout time, has recorded its history in one way or another. In what ways can history be passed on to the next generation? Why is the history important to society?

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Throughout decades, nationalities have created and wrote down their
history
 as evidence
its
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 existence and activities. As we know It has been transferred in a lot of ways
such
 as talks, engraving, parchment and
books
, but in
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last
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 centuries the most common and convenient way is considered
books
. To be more educated it is essential for each society to save and learn its
history
.
History
 can be passed to the
next
 offspring in many ways, but in my opinion,
books
 are a more acceptable and common way.
Books
 have not a long-lasting feature which is important to save information, but
also
 it is an acceptable and comfortable way for people to get information.
Books
 are easy to keep and share,
moreover
it
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 can contain many historical illustrations from different centuries. As
the
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 matter of
the
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fact, in each
country
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 we can see
books
 museums where most
the
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books
 are considered
history
. To have an educated and developed society it is important to learn the
history
 which will allow keeping your identity. So, at school children are taught their national and other countries’
history
 to develop their worldview. At the same time in some
cases
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 it is prevented to make the same mistakes that were done by our ancestors․
For example
,
last
 year in Armenia was done interpellation which found out the opinion about the importance of
history
 and ninety
percent
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 of views are thought it is essential the knowledge of
history
 for everyone.
Accordingly
, each nationality tries to keep and pass its
history
 and culture to offspring as it is considered the national wealth of any country
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • oral traditions
  • storytelling
  • preserving
  • manuscripts
  • cultural artifacts
  • conserving
  • curriculum
  • contemporary
  • documentaries
  • commemorate
  • cultural consciousness
  • genealogy
  • ancestry
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