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Success is often measured by wealth and material belongings.Do you think wealth is the best measure of success ? What makes a successful person ?

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When talking about success, we often think of
people
 who are rich or affluent.Some believe that success is based on wealth,
personally
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 I disagree with the idea that opulence is the key measure of being successful
,
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because I would argue that other factors are equally important. On the one hand, I agree that money is necessary in order for
people
 to start their
business
.
For instance
,we all need financial aid to buy
equipments
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equipment
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 or cover some
our
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 basic needs, if we want to start our own
business
.
Additionally
,when we become a successful businessman,we may have some difficulties,because nobody knows that our
business
 may get bankrupt or curb due to
the
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some financial problems.
Therefore
,in
this
 case only if we have extra money and belonging materials ,we can maintain our
business
 discipline to spend these properties.
Nevertheless
,I believe that other measures are just as important as being a rich person.
First
 and foremost,
great
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 deal of knowledge and experience
are
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 extremely important when we start a
business
.Having a good experience,
for example
,
people
 can decide right decisions in some difficult situations.
Secondly
,in my view,without
self-confidence
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 it is really hard to be successful.To elucidate,if
people
 lose their confidence it means that they cannot control their
business
,as a consequence they might get bankrupt.
Finally
,being a friendly person increases others respects and it could be useful to enhance their career. In conclusion,while wealth certainly affects being successful, I do
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 believe that money outweighs all other factors.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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