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Essay Question : People believe that social networking sites(such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree ? Give reasons and examples from your own knowledge and experience

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Nowadays a huge number of
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 are joining social media networking
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 as Facebook.
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 many believe that site
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 as Facebook had adversely affected the lifestyle and society. I agree with
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 negative impact social networking
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 has that it is addictive.
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 are connected across the globe and spend time together.
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, according to a report, the maximum amount of time playing games like ludo, pubg is twelve hours a day. As a ,
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 it is making
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 diverted from their daily work and they are becoming addicted to these
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 and which leads to an unproductive life.
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, another harmful effect of social networking
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 is online fraud. The growing amount of
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 joining networking
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 has increased more cybercrime fraud in which peoples personal info are being stolen and used by scammers.
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, recently Facebook data is being stolen by a Chinese crime group and users become the victim of fraud
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 as net banking and online shopping credit card information are being misused.
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, the number of
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 who get justice is limited, while in a majority of the cases the scammers escape unscathed. In conclusion, due to factors like addictiveness, which could drive
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 away from their lives and cybercrime. I believe
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • erosion
  • face-to-face
  • interactions
  • privacy concerns
  • data breaches
  • misinformation
  • polarize
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • procrastination
  • productivity
  • social isolation
  • dissemination
  • breeding ground
  • vast amounts
  • personal information
  • mental health
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