Some people say that the characteristic we are born will have many much more influence on our personality and development than any experiences we may have in life. To what extent do you agree with this?

Experience
is the best teacher. Nowadays, it is undoubtedly true that personality is of paramount influence in shaping
people
's attitude. A growing number of
people
believe that these would have
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impact than valuable experiences on children's growth during their upbringing. I strongly agree with
this
and will give my reasons below.
To begin
with, the reason why I believe that basic traits provide a larger proportion in creating
young
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generation's characteristic is
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they inherit their parent's gene.
In other words
, they
posess
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possess
the basic personalities and talents in their DNA's, which derived from their parents. Perhaps an outstanding example of
this
would be Naysila Mirdad, who categorised as
multi-talented
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actress in Indonesia. In fact, her parents are currently
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in the film industry,
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both of them are known as
successfull
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successful
actress and actor.
Thus
, it is obvious that
such
a gift are mainly from our family tree.
Moreover
, it is almost impossible for
people
to change their original character by
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experience
. By and large, some
people
would find
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to adapt
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new character which they obtained from personal
experience
,
thus
, they would remain the same. Take a bookworm as an example. Clearly, despite the fact that state-of-the-art technology enables us to
experience
a more convenient way to read through some free-access websites, they are unlikely to alter their habit from reading bulky books to electronic ones.
Hence
,
this
what makes me believe that genetic characters
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greater
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part in creating someone's personality. To sum up, as far as I am concerned, genetic influences take a major part in developing
millenials'
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millennials
ability and character.
Thus
, parents should polish their talents and teach them how to adapt
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positive
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cahnge
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change
in the future. Without a good parental education on children, our young generations would eventually
experience
a poor upbringing.
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