Some people opine that cinema will eventually lose its appeal to mass people and very few people will go to cinema halls. Do you agree or disagree with this view?

In
this
modern era, technology is bolstering at the speed of light. Due to the advancements in the technology, majority of
population
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are more attracted to the
internet
than movie
theater
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these days. There are certain individuals who state that
cinema
will become less popular in the coming days and only a few will watch films in theatres. I
also
agree with
this
given statement and I will support
this
view with the examples in the following paragraphs. 
To begin
with, time is the precious jewel in
this
fast-paced era. Everybody is working day and night to earn handsome money just to afford a high living standard.
Consequently
,
people
prefer to spend the rest of their leisure time at
home
by watching
movies
or series on the
internet
instead
of going out for a movie to the mall, which will save their time and
also
they can stay close to their family. Recently, a comparative survey was conducted by 'THE TIMES' on the interest of the public watching
movies
on the
internet
or
cinema
, only 25%
people
favoured going out for
movies
to
cinema
halls. Whereas, rest 75% were in a pool of using applications
such
as Netflix, amazon prime via the
internet
for the same. 
Additionally
, public places like
cinema
halls are not the safest place in comparison to one's own house.
Therefore
, staying
home
and enjoying there is the only option
people
have right now in
this
COVID-19 scenario to feel safest. So, in situations like a pandemic, in spite of the closure of the malls and theatres,
people
are able to watch
movies
at
home
with simple clicks on their screens and
this
is becoming a habit of individuals to watch any movie anywhere in their office,
home
, or with friends without moving out of the house.
As a result
, Youngsters are choosing the
internet
over the
cinema
as
this
is a more comfortable and convenient option for them. In conclusion,
although
cinema
is a perfect pastime activity to have fun with family or friends yet folks have got better choices through the development of technology.
Hence
, it is assumed by some that the popularity of
cinema
will be over soon.
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