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Many people put their personal information online (address, telephone number, and so on) for purposes such as signing up for social networks or online banking. Is this a positive or negative development?

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In
this
 cutting-edge era of technology where most of the information is shared using the internet as a medium;
therefore
, the majority of the public prefer to store their confidential data on social media platforms.
This
 practice has several adverse consequences that would be discussed in the following paragraphs. Detrimental effects of storing personal detail on distinct platforms are increasing continuously worldwide and the threat to data privacy is the foremost one, which stimulates unethical organisations to access their individuals' details to satisfy their desire of greediness.
For instance
, a few years ago, Cambridge's Analytica was alleged by some notable personalities in India for using the personal details of users on Facebook, which is a prominent social media platform.
Therefore
,
such
 insecurities are becoming omnipresent in the world of technology and users who save their private data on
such
 portal are becoming the prey for
such
 rogue firms.
Moreover
, tech-savvy devices have become quite economical,
therefore
, individuals who belong to destitute families possess these gadgets, which
further
 has enhanced the dependency of the populace.
For instance
, people hesitate to lift their finger to write information on notebooks
instead
 they use mobile applications to store relevant knowledge for future use.
As a result
,
this
 shift has reduced the storage capacity of their brain due to which most of the time they seem it difficult to reminisce mobile numbers of their near and dear ones in case of smartphone theft. To recapitulate,
although
, technology has made the required information at their disposal as it is store on the internet yet associated adverse outcomes cannot be overlooked.
Thus
, it is a liability of the higher authorities to monitor activities on
such
 platforms closely to avoid any security breaches.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ease of access
  • interconnected
  • communication
  • commerce
  • identity theft
  • privacy invasions
  • digitization
  • fraudulent activities
  • financial losses
  • reliance
  • digital profiles
  • social inequalities
  • cybersecurity measures
  • mitigate
  • digital convenience
  • mental health
  • anxiety
  • stress
  • online validation
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