With growing populations in cities, more and more people live in homes with little or no outdoor space. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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in urban masses, many
people
reside in limited space not by choice but due to scarcity. There is hardly any scope for recreational
activities
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I will highlight some of the demerits of living in
large
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city.
To begin
with, big
cities
provide ample
of
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opportunities in terms of job, ease of access to basic amenities & other social security measures.
This
attracts many
people
from rural areas which
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inturn
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increases
burden
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on city infrastructure leaving no room for open land.
For instance
, in
last
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couple of decade major
cities
in India have been
overly
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populated and there has been
manifold
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increase in migration of
people
from small town to big
cities
.
This
add
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pressure on
city
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administration to provide
shelther
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shelter
to all the
people
by cutting down trees and farmlands.
Furthermore
, kids have
more
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vulnerable impact from
this
as they tend to live in smaller space like flat. There
is
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little
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or no open parks for them to play and get involved in physical
activities
which is crucial for their development. Many youngsters spend time on screen to compensate
their
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outdoor
activities
. As per
latest
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study, on
an average small kids
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average small kids
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spend daily three to four hours in front of either computer or mobile devices which
ulitmately
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ultimately
have
negative
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impact on their eyes and brain.
As a result
,
youth
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the youth
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of
todays'
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generation has
tend
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to gain weight and become lazy which affects their overall health. To summarise,
cities
should
unquestionaly
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unquestionably
have open places for recreational and physical
activities
which is a need of the hour. In order to avoid excessive burden on
cities
administration should develop other small
cities
and provide basic facilities
alongwith
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along with
job and security measures which will result in
decrease
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in migration of masses and ultimately benefitting larger towns.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban density
  • public transportation infrastructure
  • social interaction
  • community bonding
  • mental well-being
  • urban biodiversity
  • urban heat island effect
  • energy-efficient
  • affordable housing
  • cramped living conditions
  • innovative architecture
  • interior design
  • physical activity
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • quality of life
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