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In the future, nobody will buy products newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

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Online sites have made it easy for the public to access information without the need to buy physical products like newspapers and books at no additional cost.
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 I agree with
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 statement to some extent many factors should be taken into consideration as well.
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 with, Newspapers and books are the traditional methods of reading as they were the first sources to access media coverage without any censorship.
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 online news sites are capable of providing the same details ,
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 are some censors.
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 the censors, advertisements pop up a lot more frequently on websites as compared to already printed texts ,another flaw is that reading digitalised text requires internet connections ,which are quite expensive today
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, the printed papers are still the same cost as they were in the past times.
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, the Internet contains a large amount of information that texted notes can't provide ,on top of that people have the choice to read
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 their needs without buying books as they can be pretty outdated ,
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 searches are updated at regular intervals.
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, Printing does more harm to our environment as it requires chopping wood in order to create
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 in the USA ,the government have put some restriction on organizations that harms the ecosystem for their own benefit.
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 ,texted accounts can cause some severe complications ,
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 digital media is pretty harmless and covers everyone's needs without much consequences. In conclusion, Physical texts are worse than internet-based sources in many ways ,which might put an end to
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 method of reading in the coming future.
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task achievement
Provide more specific examples to strengthen your arguments. For instance, mention specific platforms or studies related to digital consumption of news and literature.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next. For example, use varied linking words or phrases to better connect ideas.
task achievement
The essay presents a balanced view, acknowledging both the advantages and disadvantages of online media versus traditional newspapers and books.
coherence cohesion
There is a clear introduction and conclusion, framing the argument well and leaving a definite stance by the end.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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