Governments give lots of support to artists, even though some people think it is a waste of money that could have been spent better elsewhere. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Artists are well supported by the government despite some individuals who feel

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misuse of money.

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many craft institutions are in need of

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funding, I believe that public

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facilities are in more need of

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support. On the one hand, some artistic institutions are nearly too close

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the absence of cash. Theatres and cinemas need

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fund to become bigger and continue to entertain and educate society about emotions and feelings

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as love and happiness.

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, many cinemas in Saudi Arabia have begun to open in many places around the country because of the support of artistry in

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nation.

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, I think that hospitals are more deserving.

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, the Government should invest more money in public

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hospitals. Many healthcare places lack operational devices because of the lack of governmental support which has a huge effect on citizens'

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especially those who can not afford to go to private clinics.

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, eye clinics in King Khalid Hospital lack devices that are needed for operations and many patients are told to pay big prices to private eye centres. In conclusion, a huge amount of payment is provided to art fields by the government despite the viewpoint of others.

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funding is important for the development of art places, I believe that individuals'

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and well-being

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more valuable.

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task achievement

Expand on your arguments to cover a broader range of perspectives, especially the benefits of funding arts.

coherence cohesion

Ensure ideas flow logically by using more transition words and connecting sentences smoothly within and across paragraphs.

coherence cohesion

The introduction and conclusion effectively frame the essay, presenting the topic clearly and summarizing the position well.

task achievement

The examples used are relevant and help to substantiate your points, providing context to your arguments.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

231 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

government patronage
cultural heritage
national identity
creative industries
unnecessary expense
essential services
democratize
private patronage
market forces
innovation
boost tourism
subjective nature
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