All education and healthcare should be funded by government and free for everyone. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Healthcare and education
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are both essential
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of humans life.It is sometimes argued that
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should provide these
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for everyone without paying fees.While I accept that poorer members really need
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type of free
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it does not mean that everybody can utilize them. On the one hand, I agree that every country should provide good healthcare as well as education
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for their citizens.Without adequate healthcare people of all ages can become sick and
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, if doctors have not enough knowledge they will have difficulty treating patients.
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, the number of patients will increase in the world.
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,
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should at least provide these amenities to necessitous citizens as soon as possible.In fact, if poorer inhabitants may get ill,they cannot afford
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care of themselves due to
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they have
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as supporting their families and the number of taxes.
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, we may all wish for those vital facilities to be provided free of charge,
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some people do not understand that
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spend
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income to build hospitals,schools as well as produce adequate medical
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and medicine for us.
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,these
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and
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take a great deal of money
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,
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need to obtain it from somewhere.Even though, countries allow these
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free for people, in
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case
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they will increase
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of taxes.Owing to the fact that every activities and
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based on each other and maintain
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countries
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discipline. In conclusion,it seems clear that poorer members of our society need
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type of aid their life,while others should adapt to pay fees for
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because these incomes spend our benefits.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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