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Some people think that people are responsible for their happiness. Others feel that happiness depends on other factors in their life. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is undeniable that
people
 are responsible for happiness. It is their own choice. While others believe that serval factors are the reason behind happiness. Both perspectives have a strong statement that I will discuss in the forthcoming paragraphs and elaborate my own opinion too. On the one hand,
people
 believe that joyful life depends upon them.
For instance
,
people
 who choose their career according to their interest has more productive and enjoy more in the office or workplace.
For example
, in a survey, 70% of employees happy in their job because they do what they like the most and
this
 makes the company profit more as compared to those who have no interest in their job.
Moreover
, many
people
 love to listen to music, dancing and painting to make them cheerful. They forget the present situation and goes in a meditative state that means a state in which
people
 leave time and space, and enjoy more in their singing or painting.
On the other hand
, some
people
 feel that they need a materialistic thing to make them happy in life. When
people
 feel bored they meet with their family or friend and spend time with them to enjoy some quality time.
Further
, many
people
 go shopping, restaurant and other entertainment places. To illustrate my point, many Females feel happy when they go shopping with their friends.
This
 will cope them overcome the boredom situation. In conclusion, happiness does not depend on things, it depends upon the
people
. One thing makes one
people
 happy and another disappointed.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Self-reliance
  • Positive psychology
  • Socioeconomic status
  • Well-being
  • Mindset
  • Personal choices
  • Environmental factors
  • Interpersonal relationships
  • Emotional resilience
  • Quality of life
  • Subjective well-being
  • External circumstances
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