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Some people believe that if a police officer carries guns, it can encourage a higher level of violence. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is often believed by a few sections of society that the
violence
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 rate will rise if
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 authorities carry a weapon.
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, some
people
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, including myself, completely disagree with
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 view. I feel that to reduce the
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 rate and protect themselves; Policemen should carry guns or other safety weapons. The primary reason behind carrying a gun is to deter criminal acts. Thieves or criminals would think twice or be scared before commencing any
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 if they know that
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 officer around them are armed.
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,
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 and
crime
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 will significantly reduce in society.
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, a robber might stop his criminal thought if he is afraid of
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officials
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 carrying guns could shoot him from a long distance. Contrary to
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, failure to carry a weapon might give offenders a strong advantage in terms of their ability to commit
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 without any corresponding risk. Another reason is that
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 officers can protect themselves and
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 from dangerous situations. Certainly, many criminals keep various harmful and life-threatening weapons, which they can use against not only
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 persons but
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 citizens.
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, if there were no safety precautions for
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officials
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, there, as well as
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's lives, could have come at a risk.
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, in many terror attacks globally, the terrorist killed innocent citizens and
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 officers.
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, in
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 circumstances, to save innocent lives, carrying a gun is a necessary precaution for
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officials
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. In conclusion,
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 some
people
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 oppose carrying weapons by
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 officers in fear of
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, I completely disagree. In my view, to control and reduce the
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 rate as well as to save
people
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 and own life,
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officials
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 should carry a gun.

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