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Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities. Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages?

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The diagram outlines the process of
electricity
 production in
a hydroelectric plants
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hydroelectric plants
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. overall, the process which includes 6 different stages during two shifts (day and night), begins with storing rivers'
water
 behind a dam and ends in sending
electricity
 to a national grid. It would suffice to take a quick glance at the process to realize that
initially
, the
water
 of
river
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the river
a river
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 is collected into a
reservoir
, namely "high-level
reservoir
" and
then
 in the day shift
this
 reserved
water
 flows
downward
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down
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 a
power
 station which is located in a lower level through some pipes which their valves are opened during the day.
Then
after
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, in the
power
 station, the extreme stream of
water
 hits a turbine which is connected to a generator. As a consequence of
this
 the turbine starts to spin very fast and the produced
power
,
then
, can
converted
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be converted
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 into the
electricity
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electric
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 current through the generator. After that, the generated
electricity
 through the
power
 lines is sent to the national grid. The used
water
,
on the other hand
, is stored in another
reservoir
, namely
"low-level
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a "low-level
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reservoir
" for
the
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future demands.
By contrast
, in the night shift, the general pattern seems to be vice versa. The
water
 of
low-level
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the low-level
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reservoir
 is pumped by the reversible turbines upward the high-level
reservoir
 which now is closed at night.
Moreover
, the
water
 of rivers and
this
 return
water
 are reserved in the high-level
reservoir
 for use in the
next
 cycle
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-life balance
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • stress relief
  • productivity
  • economic growth
  • career progression
  • skill enhancement
  • quality time
  • financial security
  • leisure activities
  • physical health
  • personal relationships
  • stress-related illnesses
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