Some people believe that the best to produce a happier society is to ensure that tere are only small differences between the richest and poorest members. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Society
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of
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of
people
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which is full of human beings are sorrowful, few human kinds things that the narrow
gap
between the richest and the poorest citizens secure the happiness. For some rational reasons, I firmly disagree
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the aforementioned statement. Both the relevant and justification is
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and discussed in the paragraph. There are several reasons for me to completely disagree that
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gap
between
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and
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is not
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thing. To be more precise, if there will be equality
then
no one will do work harder to compete
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other. Owing, to
this
situation, they
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differently and spend
same
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standard of life together. Since
civilions
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civilians
ceased their work, their lifestyle has become sedentary.
Besides
this
, nation
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alot
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a lot
because of which they stopped doing or giving respect and
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carr
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towards the surrounding.
However
; it is inevitable that only better earning do not provide happiness.To cite an example, a survey
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by
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of India that 10%
people
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of people
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will be happy after narrowing the
gap
of income between the wealthiest and poorest.
Hence
, only by improving the citizens well being
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we built a harmonious society without more diseases. On contrary, some may
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my viewpoints. The prime argument they
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bring
on the surface that
people
would be happier if
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need
met
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, especially in health care, education, infrastructure and entertainment.
However
;
such
essential things, are provided by the authority of the
government
, thereby one manages and
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a fair system to use the income taxes received equally.
Moreover
, good tax
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contributed by rich and the poor
people
would reduce the
gap
and would make
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happier.
For instance
, the wealthiest
people
would pay higher tax and the least poverty
class less
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amount. And, the
government
should use that money to pay back for the benefits of
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nation by giving free access to healthcare, education and entertainment. To recapitulate, I think that
government
plays a vital role in controlling the public money bad helps society becomes happier by enhancing local tangible, not by cutting the salaries between the richest and poorest.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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