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Today many countries import food from different parts of the world. Is this a positive or negative development?

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In
this
 day and age, more and more contemporary attention has been placed on the opinion that nowadays, many countries have a tendency to import foreign
food
. From my perspective,
this
 trend has both positive and negative developments.
To begin
 with, I strongly believe that importing
food
 from different parts of the world is an affirmative development.
This
 is because ,by virtue of
this
 policy from the government, inhabitants living in that nation will be beneficial. To be more specific, they will have a wider range of choices when they go to markets, supermarkets or groceries to purchase
food
 and most importantly, the diversity of
food
 options may
also
 help them buy products having reasonable costs with their budget.
For instance
,
last
 year, when the cost of pork meat in my country was high, immediately Vietnam government allowed to import pork meat from different nations
such
 as America, Thailand or Laos and thanks to
this
 decision, Vietnamese people not only had better and more suitable choices
,
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 but
also
 did not have to concern about the cost of pork meat.
However
, importing foreign
food
 has
also
 its own drawback.
This
 can be explained by the reason that if the quality of that imported one is low, particularly the
food
 safety is not guaranteed due to the deficiency of careful verification from the authority, consumers in that country will be negatively affected. To be more detailed, they will be more likely to become vulnerable to a lot of serious diseases,
therefore
 weakening people’s health directly. In conclusion, with all the reasons mentioned above, I suppose that imported
food
 has its own advantage as well as its own disadvantage.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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