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A lot of places in the world rely on tourism as a main source of income. Unfortunately, tourism can also be a source of problems if it is not managed correctly. Describe the advantages and disadvantages of tourism in the modern world. Do you think that the benefits of tourism outweigh the drawbacks?

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In the past few decades,
people
 discovered a lot of sources of income and
tourism
 is one of them. Many places across the globe, depend upon the tourist.
Nevertheless
, some major problems are occurred due to
tourism
.
This
 assignment indeed
describe
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 both the advantages and disadvantages of
tourism
. In my perspective, the merits of
tourism
 overlap the demerits. The predominant advantage of
tourism
 is that it is beneficial for both local
people
 and the government. For the residential
people
, it is the basic source of income like
resturants
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restaurants
, hotels, shopkeepers, and transportation. All these depend upon tourist. The more
people
 come to their country the more they have
earnings
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 and it could
strong
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 the economy. The government get taxes from locals as well as from
the
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travelers
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. The officials spend these taxes to improve the infrastructure of their country.
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, in
coastal
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the coastal
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 region, many
people
 visit
to
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these area
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this area
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 and the government improve the road, historical building, and many tourist places.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable tourism
  • ecotourism
  • heritage sites
  • hospitality industry
  • tourist influx
  • cultural commodification
  • ecological footprint
  • economic diversification
  • carrying capacity
  • cultural sensitivity
  • destination marketing
  • travel advisories
  • visitor management
  • impact assessment
  • tourism revenues
  • authentic experience
  • visitor satisfaction
  • conservation efforts
  • seasonal fluctuation
  • social sustainability
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