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Some companies spend a lot of money on scientific research and use animals for testing. Do the advantages of using animals in research outweigh its disadvantages?

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In
this
 day and age, more and more contemporary attention has been placed on animal rights, especially
experiments
 tested on
animals
.
Although
 the drawbacks of conducting animal experimentation to do scientific research are varied, in my opinion, it still brings more significant benefits. On the one hand, some people have arguments that testing on
animals
 for scientific purposes is disadvantageous in some aspects. It is believed that an animal has to suffer many pains since it is given an illness so that it can be used to measure the effectiveness of a new drug.
However
, benefits to
humans
 are not justifiable enough to cause that level of suffering for
animals
, so
humans
 have no rights to subject
animals
 to
such
 kinds of trauma.
Besides
, giving
humans
 the privilege to decide the lives of other species can somehow stimulate the evil and cruelty inside them, making society full of inhumane and immoral people as well as putting many
animals
 at risk of becoming threatened.
On the other hand
, I hold a firm belief that the advantages of animal testing remain irreplaceable, outweighing the mentioned drawbacks.
In particular
, there is an irrefutable fact that carrying
experiments
 on
animals
 can contribute significantly to billions of human lives being saved.
This
 can be exemplified by many surgical techniques
such
 as open-heart surgery or heart transplants were developed through using
animals
.
Besides
,
animals
 can act as a model for the study of human diseases since they and
humans
 share hundreds of illnesses. As a consequence, the use of
animals
 for
experiments
 can provide a great deal of relevant knowledge of the body’s functions, and many of the new drugs being marketed today were in part created thanks to
this
 process. In conclusion, I am more convinced that the disadvantages of conducting
experiments
 on
animals
 are surpassed by the aforementioned advantages as these approaches make great contributions to the well-being of the public.
Submitted by Uyen Dinh on

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