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The education of young people is the main priority in countries around the world. Some people believe that educating adults who cannot read or write is essential for the society and more funding should be made available for it. Do you agree or disagree?

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People
 argue that countries must prioritize the education of the youth,
while
 others opine
to have
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that
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 societies shift their focus on educating unlearned adults. I agree with the view of adult schooling and,
this
 essay will explain why we should fund
them
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it
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. Adult illiteracy affects various parts of life.
Firstly
, older
people
 who cannot read and write are more susceptible to
live
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living
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 destitutely.
That is
,
people
 living in poverty are either unemployed or work in low-skilled jobs.
As a result
 of,
inability
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the inability
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 to offer proper schooling for children.
Also
, to support finances, they resort to theft and other crimes.
Secondly
, parents discussing stumbling blocks
help
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helps
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 students in their studies. Primary and secondary school children need to grasp several concepts,
seek
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and seek
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 the parent's help in reviewing lessons.
For example
, the child understands the syllabus taught much better with the help of their parent's way of teaching and so,
perform
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performs
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 well in studies. It becomes a disappointment for unlearned parents and ultimately sends their
kid
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kids
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 to tutorial centres.
Lastly
, non-literate
people
 suffer from serious health issues. These individuals tend to have more workplace accidents, prolonged recovery
period
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periods
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 and more
frequently
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frequent
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 misuse
medication
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of medication
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.
Due to
 the fact they have trouble reading and understanding, they show ignorance towards healthcare
resource
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resources
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,
relevant
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and relevant
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 information like warnings, dosage,
contraindications
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and contraindications
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.
Therefore
, we must take urgent measures and invest funds to educate these adults. They can find respectable and safe jobs for themselves. In conclusion, education and learning
to
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apply
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have no age limit, and
consequently
, I reiterate that adult education is immensely vital in today's society as it
also
 boosts the country's
overall
 literacy rate.
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Provide a clearer introduction and conclusion that more explicitly address the task question.
task response
Focus on directly addressing the task question throughout the essay, with a balanced consideration of both viewpoints.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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