pople who cause their own illnesses through unhealthy lifestyles and poor diets should have to pay more for health care. To extent do you agree or disagree. Give your opinion.

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lifestyle
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illness
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viewpoints because when individuals suffering from any illness they have to pay more for
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and owning different
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or hospital, they have to pay more money to get
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lifestyle
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obesity, due to
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fit, for
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, they have to pay money and their own efforts to become fit as
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,
although
many individuals unhealthy eating habits, so that they visit
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a doctor and nutritionist where they get
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diet chart and some exercise plans, because of
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they can be replaced their unhealthy
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lifestyle
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opt doctors and nutritionist diet plans , as consequences, become more healthy in their life fit as
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On the other hand
, there are two main reasons why
people
have to pay for their
health
care.
To begin
with, these days, vast individuals became as couch potato due to their sedentary
lifestyle
just watching t.v. and playing video games, because of
this
they welcome unusual
health
problem. Namely, obesity, diabetes and heart problems.
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, they visit
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health
care where they have to pay money as well as efforts to maintain their fitness level. To
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India
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65% of younger
people
become fat due to their
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sedentary
life style
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, for that. They Join Gyms and diet chart from
nutritinonist
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nutritionist
nutritionists
to ameliorate their
fintess
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fitness
,
this
research conducted by
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of India. To conclude, there are various causes why they owning
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kind of illnesses, but with certain measures ,
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issues can be easily mitigated.
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