Social Media has helped us increase our virtual networks. This has isolated us physically, making us socially awkward in person. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion.

Today, the way to stay connected is by staying online, chatting with friends or colleagues,

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might give a feel of having many people in our life

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it needn’t be the truth. In my opinion, the current trend is not beneficial in building a real network and having seamless social interactions.

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essay will discuss how online networks fool us into believing

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reality and its repercussions.

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, staying online is the way to stay in touch

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requires an individual to stay glued to a device, be it a mobile phone or a laptop

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is done to communicate with one another.

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, what one does not realise is that

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makes the person distant from

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family dear ones.

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, when I am messaging a friend, I stop realising what is

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my surroundings.

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, another trap is the request that one can send or accept to grow one’s network and make friends, but it doesn’t really help the purpose. No matter how many online friends it is not sensible to rely on them to come in handy

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in times of need

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it is the dear ones that can be reached out to at any point in time.

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I was in need of support, it was my sibling who was there for me.

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stuck to a device makes a human lose out on the basis of

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society,

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people will only be comfortable connecting via devices and not face to face. In my opinion, too much of anything is not good

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activities in moderation can help make things better.

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May 22, 2021

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task response

Be clear on your view at the start and stay with it through the essay.

structure

End with a short, clear conclusion that restates your view and the main points.

content

Give more real, concrete examples to back each point.

language

Check grammar and keep simple, short sentences to avoid mistakes.

content

A clear stance against the harm of too much online life.

organization

A simple order with First, Second, and More helps the reader.

content

Uses real life examples to support ideas.

Fully explain your ideas

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Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

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Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

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Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: <4

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

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4 paragraphs

280 words

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real life
social
media
networks
relationships
awkward
shy
confident
increase
decrease
benefit
drawback
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