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Everyone should adopt a vegetarian diet because eating meat can cause serious health problems. Do you agree or disagree?

#diet #meat #health
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Some
people
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 consider that everyone should choose a vegetarian diet
instead
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 of
meat
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. Personally, I accept the importance of eating vegetables, but at the same time, I do not agree
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that
people
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 extract all types of
meat
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 from their life. It is obvious that
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 eating fruit and greens is useful
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because
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 type of diet is cheaper and more healthy. It is available
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 citizens with
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 and lower level income.
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, plant-based food
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 necessary vitamins, especially fibre, which prevent us from many dangerous conditions. Consumption of
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,
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, is harmful to health, because it makes cholesterol level increase. It can suppress the extinction danger of animals, so it is
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 ecologically sustainable way.
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,
people
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 will be more satisfied with
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 food supply and the starvations are able to decrease over time.
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, a number of
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thinks
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 that, if humankind
refuse
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 to intake
meat
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, they will protect the health, animals, and environment.
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 to the above idea, it is not right to reject to intake all types. Some
meat
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 proteins and useful vitamins for the body which greens can not provide.
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, fish is good for the eyes, promotes brain health and can fight depression, because it contains Omega 3,
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, red
meat
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 contains high biological value protein with all eight essential amino acids required by adults and all nine required by children. Another example can be chicken. B-group vitamins
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 and minerals like iron, zinc, and copper make poultry
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 a valuable food. In conclusion, a vegetarian diet can help a person stay fit and be environmentally friendly, but it is not right for me not to consume any
meat
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, because it contains a lot of useful minerals.
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