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Mrs Barrett, an English-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone to help her in her home for a few hours a day next summer. Write a letter to Mrs Barrett. In your letter - suggest how you could help her in her home -say why you would like to do this work -explain when you will and will not be available

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Dear Mrs Barett Hope you are well. I saw an
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 regarding the help that you need in your house for a few hours a day next Summer. There
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few things I could help you with to keep your house neat and organised.
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, I could manage your garden by watering your plants and mowing your lawn.
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, I can help with the housework.
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, cleaning and mopping.
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, I could help you to prepare meals for your family. I would like to work as I love cleaning and cooking for others and as I have no plans
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 summer, I would be happy to have a summer job. I will be available
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 from Monday to Friday.
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, I will not be available on the weekend since
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 family time. Hope to hear from you soon. Kind regards, Joscelin
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complete response
You might want to add a little more detail, perhaps a line about why your timing fits well with this job.
logical structure
Consider using connectors or transition words to enhance the flow further, though your paragraphing is already excellent.
greeting and closing
The opening and closing of the letter are polite and appropriate, making the letter sound very professional.
single idea per paragraph
Each paragraph presents distinct ideas clearly and concisely, contributing to an overall well-structured response.
suitable writing tone
The tone is very polite and matches well with the purpose of the letter, indicating a professional attitude.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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