It is often thought that the increase in juvenile crime can be attributed to violence in the media. Do you agree that this is the main cause of juvenile crime? What solutions can you offer to deal with this situation?

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Crime
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is a growing problem in modern societies
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and is usually linked with poverty and unemployment. Juvenile
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,
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, has risen in the
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decades. Some think that it is especially due to
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to
violence
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in the
media
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. Indeed, radio, television, newspapers and
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are
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violence
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essay will
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agree that
violence
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showed in the
media
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is the main reason for the rise seen in juvenile
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and will describe some measures to deal with
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situation.
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people
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are bombarded with
violence
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in the news. Terrorism and violent crimes are all over the news all time.
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a considerable
exposure
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to
violence
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can
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occur in online
videogames
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video games
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. Actually, a lot of young
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watch television and play
videogames
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without any adult supervision nowadays.
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, other conditions
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as family environment and peers' influence have
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major importance in the behaviour of children and adolescents.
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, dysfunctional families and peers can influence behaviour and lead to juvenile
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. Some measures can be taken to try to reduce
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exposure
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the exposure
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of young
people
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to
violence
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, and,
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, tackle juvenile
crime
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. Parents or carers should supervise young children and adolescents while they are watching television and playing
videogames
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. Whenever needed, adults should limit
exposure
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to
violence
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from
such
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sources in order to protect young
people
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Furthermore
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, adults should give proper explanations and be available to talk in order to help process violent scenes. In conclusion, youth
crime
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is an increasing problem,
primarly
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primarily
due to
exposure
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to
violence
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in the
media
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. Dysfunctional families and peers' influence
also
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contribute to the rise in juvenile
crime
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. Adults have a fundamental role in controlling access to
violence
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in the
media
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, and,
thus
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, reducing juvenile
crime
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.
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