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Some high school students work part-time in addition to going to school. What are the advantages and disadvantages of high school students having part-time jobs? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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These times many teenagers are doing a part-time
job
 with
study
.While a part-time offer certainly some benefits like financial stability and real-life work exposure.At the same time, the
drawbacks
 of the part-time
job
 cannot be overlooked. In some cases, it has seen that students who are doing part-time
jobs
 diverted from their actual life goals.I will be going to compare side by side both the advantages and disadvantages of a part-time
job
 in my essay. On the one hand, there is no denial in accepting the fact that work with
study
 always teaches some good real-life lessons and gives a sense of financial freedom.
For example
, a student who is
also
 working knows how to manage time effectively and how to deal with customers.Sometimes there are cases where parents are unable to pay high tuition fee for studies, in
such
 scenario part-time
jobs
 enables the child to pay his/her tuition by their own:
that is
 how part-time
job
 pave a way to encourage education.
On the other hand
, part-time
jobs
 offer good benefits but there are several
drawbacks
 that come along with them, like distraction towards studies, or complete dropout to
study
. A survey conducted on school dropouts in London reveals 77 per cent out of total drop outer are part-time workers. Financial liberty at an early age can deviate teens towards bad habits like smoking or liquor consumption. After analyzing both arguments, it is not hard to find part-time
jobs
 carrying more advantages over
drawbacks
.These all
drawbacks
 can be mitigated by introducing some restrictions or spreading awareness among children.
For example
, schools can provide counselling to part-timers and make them understand how to best utilize money and time and their primary focus ought to be on
study
.
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