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Some high school students work part-time in addition to going to school. What are the advantages and disadvantages of high school students having part-time jobs? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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These times many teenagers are doing a part-time
job
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 with
study
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.While a part-time offer certainly some benefits like financial stability and real-life work exposure.At the same time, the
drawbacks
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 of the part-time
job
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 cannot be overlooked. In some cases, it has seen that students who are doing part-time
jobs
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 diverted from their actual life goals.I will be going to compare side by side both the advantages and disadvantages of a part-time
job
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 in my essay. On the one hand, there is no denial in accepting the fact that work with
study
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 always teaches some good real-life lessons and gives a sense of financial freedom.
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, a student who is
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 working knows how to manage time effectively and how to deal with customers.Sometimes there are cases where parents are unable to pay high tuition fee for studies, in
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 scenario part-time
jobs
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 enables the child to pay his/her tuition by their own:
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 how part-time
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 pave a way to encourage education.
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, part-time
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 offer good benefits but there are several
drawbacks
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 that come along with them, like distraction towards studies, or complete dropout to
study
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. A survey conducted on school dropouts in London reveals 77 per cent out of total drop outer are part-time workers. Financial liberty at an early age can deviate teens towards bad habits like smoking or liquor consumption. After analyzing both arguments, it is not hard to find part-time
jobs
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 carrying more advantages over
drawbacks
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.These all
drawbacks
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 can be mitigated by introducing some restrictions or spreading awareness among children.
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, schools can provide counselling to part-timers and make them understand how to best utilize money and time and their primary focus ought to be on
study
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.

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