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Some people do not go directly to college but travel or work for a short time. Do you think this has more advantages or disadvantages for their studies

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A lot of teenagers and youngsters, nowadays prefer to do small scale jobs or to
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 to nearby states before joining their colleges. It is different from the previously practising belief that
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 should complete his or her
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 before anything else. In my opinion, travelling or doing a job before getting into college is beneficial in many aspects On
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 hand,
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 gives self-confidence and boost their morale as doing jobs or going on
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 will make
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 meet many different people and increase their exposure to different attitudes. Along with it, they will learn to behave well and co-operate with the surrounding mates. That will eventually make them keen observer and better humans in future. In recent research by oxford university, it was found that people who
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 more are better able to adjust to new surroundings
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, doing a job may provide some financial assistance to those who are
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 unable to afford
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. Along with
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, it provides some time for them to relax and get ready for their future hardships as professional
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 is no piece of cake. While they enjoy
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 time, they will feel more refreshed in their
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 phase of life. In short, taking a break in between
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 and utilising it for
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 or work is
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 great idea, since ,
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 way, more practical youngsters will be in-market tomorrow. They will be having more social interactions and a better understanding of behaviours and will be more willing to contribute to society
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