More and more wild animals are on the verge of extinction and other are on the endangered list. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to solve this problem?

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In the contemporary world, it is clear that a myriad of wild animal species have disappeared or are on the verge of extinction. In
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essay, I will outline the
reaons
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reasons
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phenomenon and give possible solutions to mitigate it.
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with, since the industrial revolution took place, the population around the globe has multiplied widely, leading to
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of different venues that used to be native forests.
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, in Brazil, there is a
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ecossystem
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ecosystem
called
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the Atlantic
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forest, which remains only less than 5% of the original vegetation due to
dewooding
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rewarding
and anthropic action, giving space to huge buildings, cattle breeders' farms, and other stuff.
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, amid
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environmental crime,
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, several original species that belonged exclusively to the forest were lost,
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of being killed, trafficked, or simply died, as they were
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adapted
to the
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ecosystem
.
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, there are a lot of things that can be implemented by
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society or by the government to settle
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setback. To support
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, individuals can be aware that they share
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earth with other beings,
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, if a snake or other animal appears in their home, they should not kill it, the
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agency must be called to rescue it.
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, the
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federation
must introduce to primary school curriculum classes about wild animals and their importance in the food chain and what probably would happen if they were extinguished. To summarize, non-human species are human responsibilities as they are endangered because of the fact that man put his needs in front of
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nature's
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.
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, it is required from the same ones who caused the problem to solve it, whether it is the government or the society, everyone needs to collaborate.
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