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some people think that the internet makes a person more sociable while other think it makes a person less sociable. discuss both views and give your opinion?

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In today's world, the
Internet
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 is one of the biggest inventions of the century. There are reasons why some
people
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 think that the
internet
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 has made
people
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 less sociable whereas there are others who think that with
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 new technology
people
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 are becoming more sociable. I will discuss my views about both opinions in
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 essay. In my point of view, I think the
internet
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 has made
people
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's life so much easier. With the help of the
internet
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,
people
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 can talk to anyone around the globe by sitting in their houses. There are reasons why
people
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 avoid going out to meet other
people
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.
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, with the advent of new technology
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 as smartphones, tablets and gaming laptop,
people
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 get so involved in them that they spend their most of their time on
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.
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, my brother loves to play games on his laptop. Due to
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, he hardly goes out with his
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. He spends most of the time playing games on the laptop.
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, with the help of the
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 one can attend any social event and meet new
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.
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, I always like to attend any social event happening in the town to meet new
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.
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, there is so many application
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 as Facebook, Twitter, Instagram, where
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 can make new
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. I have made hundreds of new
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 using these applications not just in my own country but
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 in other countries.
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 to
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, If I don't get a chance to go out and meet those new
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, I try to arrange a video conference. With ,
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 we can all gather in a single place without going out. In conclusion, I think we should properly use the new technology and spend some time outside with
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 and family.
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,
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 we can talk to
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 over the
internet
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, it is always better to go outside and talk to
people
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 face to face.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social media
  • forums
  • chat rooms
  • interaction
  • introverted
  • belonging
  • virtual social events
  • video calls
  • messaging apps
  • long-distance relationships
  • face-to-face interactions
  • non-verbal cues
  • real-world conversations
  • superficial interactions
  • meaningful relationships
  • dependency
  • isolation
  • online presence
  • physical social events
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