Some people think that the best way to reduce the crime is to gibe longer prison sentences. others, however, believe there are better alternative ways of reducing crime. Discuss both the views and provide your opinion

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Many people believe that
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jail
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period can reduce the
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rate. others,
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, thinking that there are other methods
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as
rehabilitation
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and education in
jail
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can
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that can
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reduce
crime
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in society. In my opinion,
longer
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the longer
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prison
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sentence
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can reduce
the
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apply
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crime
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.
This
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essay will discuss
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the views in forthcoming paragraphs. To commence with, Others and I as well believe
time
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the time
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period of
jail
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after committing
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crime
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a crime
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should be lengthier. When criminals stay in
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for
longer
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a longer
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duration of their
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their mindset can be changed. They will realise their fault
in
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this
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time and will not
crime
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after release from
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.
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, In Norway,
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prison
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the prison
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sentence
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of
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for
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any
crime
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is
minimum
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a minimum
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of 15 years. With
this
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, people of
country
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the country
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feel safe and
also
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there is less chance of again committing
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crime
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a crime
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.
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, some people think there are other ways
such
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as
rehabilitation
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and education in
prison
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to reduce
crime
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.
Rehabilitation
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will calm criminals
mind
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and they will quit the
crime
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.
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, some believe that when a person will educate and earn his bread
then
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there will no need to commit
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crime
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a crime
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. Government should
also
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provide some small loan to establish a small scale business so that everyone can earn
then
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there will no need to commit
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crime
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a crime
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. To conclude, In my opinion,
Lengthier
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a Lengthier
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jail
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sentence
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will help to change the offender's
mind
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. When a criminal
spend
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most of the part of his life in
jail
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his
mind
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will change.
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, other think
rehabilitation
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and education can change the
criminals
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criminal's
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mind
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.
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