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Some people think that we can use as much fresh water as we want. Others think that fresh water supply should be controlled strictly by governments as the sources are limited. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The Earth is ninety
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 surrounded by
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,
still
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 only
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 of it can be used for human consumption. For years, there has been an ongoing debate between people who believe
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 limited supply of
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freshwater
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water
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 should be managed by the authorities while others argue that
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 of
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 natural resource should be not restricted. In
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 essay, we will consider both the aspects and
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 I will present my opinion.
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, considering
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freshwater
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water
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 as a natural resource it can be said that every human has
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 right to utilize it as per his requirement.
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, the control totally given to the authorities may lead to some corrupt
practises
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.
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, The officials in Assam, a state in India
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 suspended for supplying fresh
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 to various soft drink companies for profit. There
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 cases where rich metropolitan are supplied more
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water
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 than their neighbouring villages.
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, though it is argued that natural resources should be free, it definitely needs to be managed especially when it is scarce. Controlled
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 supply will avoid people from misusing it, aslo
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 unused
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 can be supplied to countries with poverty and lack
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 reservoirs.
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, thousands of families face
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 shortage in northern
africa
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 due to the climatic conditions and millions of deaths due to
shortage
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a shortage
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 of basic human needs. Speaking about corruption, it is unavoidable in any country for that matter. The governing boards should improve their anti-corruption
beareu
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bearer
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 for avoiding corruption scams by some authorities. In Conclusion, I would agree that important and basic resource
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 as
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water
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 should be controlled by the governments so that they can provide other poor nations as well as educate their own people to use it wisely.
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