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In many western countries there are an increasing number of couples choosing to have no children. What are the advantages and disadvantages to couples having no children?

#countries #couples #children
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It is a fact that nowadays, the proportion of not having a child is increasing in many western nations due to
couples
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 does not
want
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 take any responsibility
of
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for
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children
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.
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However
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 there are many benefits and drawbacks of
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 phenomenon which will discuss in
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 with,
care free
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carefree
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life
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 and spend more time for own are the main aspects behind couple do not want
a
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children
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children
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 in their
life
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.
This
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 is because
children
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 are
huge
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 responsibility for each of them. They need special attention and care either of mother or father. Not spending free time for own after having
a
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children
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children
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. To cite an example for
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, many famous
actress
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do
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 not having
a
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children
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children
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at
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in
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 their 30’s. They only focus on their job or career.
Sometime
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 they would be an obstacle
of
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to
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 their career as well. To cite an example, many famous
actress
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actresses
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do
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does
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 not having
a
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children
a child
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children
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at
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 their 30’s. They only focus on their job or career. Another reason, Child care would be expensive things for
couple
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a couple
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therefore
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 one of them put forward themselves to
fulfill
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needs
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the needs
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 of their family
through
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financially.
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, those who do not have any kids suffer very
lovely
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 when they become older.
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,
child
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the child
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 is
medium
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 of
an
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existence of
relationship
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the relationship
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. To explain
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, whenever, the critical situation and clause happened between
couples
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 the
children
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 is the supportive and medium of your relationship
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, in the public survey by the news channel, suggest that 60% of
couples
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 are having
baby
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 not think about divorce. In conclusion, I believe that it would be a worse thing if
couples
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 not having
a
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children
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children
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 feeling alone and might a possibility to have
stressful
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life
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Also
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 it is a huge responsibility to have
baby
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a baby
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 in
life
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 as
mean
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a mean
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of
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financially, emotionally as well as mentally
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 couple would be ready for it.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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