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Government should make laws about people’s nutrition and food choice. Other argue that is their choice. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The picture depicts the procedure of manufacturing
bricks
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 numbers for the construction industry. From a general perspective, the production of
bricks
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 takes place throughout sevens stages beginning with digging up
clay
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 and finishing with transporting complete products to consumers. In the
first
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 stage of the process, the staff use an excavator in order to dig up
clay
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 from the ground. After that,
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clay
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 is laid and filtered on the mental grid in order to grind smaller pieces in the roller machine.
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, sand and water are mixed with
clay
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. In the following,
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 mixture is formed through a wire cutter or mould to create the shape of
bricks
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. When the process of forming the shape of
bricks
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that is
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 completed, the number of
bricks
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 is put into the drying oven to dry for 1 - 2 days.
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, it is moved to heat at a moderate temperature of 200 to 900 degree in the
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 kiln.
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, it is
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 burned at the higher temperature of 8700-1300 degree in the
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 kiln before cooling in the cooling chamber for 2 to 3 days. The large
bricks
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 are packaged and transporting the finished products by a large truck in order to distribute to consumers.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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