In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

In the
last
few decades,
people
in several lands have started to consume huge amounts of fast
food
. ,
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this
has
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lead them to deal with health issues.
hence
, the government must control
this
difficulty by forcing
people
to pay more tax on fast
food
I strongly agree that
this
is the best way to tackle
this
issue by raising the fast-
foodfood
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food food
taxes.
Firstly
, the reason why many
people
consume a huge amount of fast
food
is that it’s affordable everywhere.
Besides
the prices are quite cheap.
As a result
,
people
who don’t have time to make
food
so they choose to order fast
food
instead
.
Subsequently
will suffer from many issues
such
as obesity diabetes and cardiac desires.
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example
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according to the ‘Nutrition’
magazine
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80% of students who eat fast
food
regularly are suffering from obesity. In order to tackle
this
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health
issues
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the government should take a serious step, by adding more taxes with
this
increasing
people
start
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the other kind of
food
.
Such
as Subway where the
food
there are 100% healthy. That’s the reason why the
food
there more expensive than other
fast
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food
restaurants In
conclusion
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eating fast
food
permanently obstacle
people
from living a normal healthy life,
therefore
the ideal solution is to hinder
people
by raising fast
food
taxes
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart disease
  • health outcomes
  • healthcare costs
  • consumer behavior
  • socio-economic backgrounds
  • ethical implications
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies
  • regulations
  • nutritional content
  • healthier food options
  • government intervention
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