In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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few decades,
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in several lands have started to consume huge amounts of fast
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lead them to deal with health issues.
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, the government must control
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difficulty by forcing
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to pay more tax on fast
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I strongly agree that
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is the best way to tackle
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issue by raising the fast-
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food food
taxes.
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, the reason why many
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consume a huge amount of fast
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is that it’s affordable everywhere.
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the prices are quite cheap.
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,
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who don’t have time to make
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so they choose to order fast
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instead
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will suffer from many issues
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as obesity diabetes and cardiac desires.
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according to the ‘Nutrition’
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80% of students who eat fast
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regularly are suffering from obesity. In order to tackle
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health
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the government should take a serious step, by adding more taxes with
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the other kind of
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.
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as Subway where the
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there are 100% healthy. That’s the reason why the
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there more expensive than other
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food
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restaurants In
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eating fast
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permanently obstacle
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from living a normal healthy life,
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the ideal solution is to hinder
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by raising fast
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taxes
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart disease
  • health outcomes
  • healthcare costs
  • consumer behavior
  • socio-economic backgrounds
  • ethical implications
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies
  • regulations
  • nutritional content
  • healthier food options
  • government intervention
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