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Both poor and the rich find the accessibility into the university difficult. Do you agree or not?

#accessibility #university
Today's juveniles claim that accessibility
into
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 the university is difficult for everyone. In
this
 essay, I will outline why I utterly disagree with
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,
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 and explain why I consider
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 complicated for some than for others.
To begin
 with, rich individuals, indeed, are
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 privileged, considering their education in private schools and other personal life aspects.
For instance
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social
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 class A and B students have both parents alive and together, and live in secure
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. As a
further
 matter, despite it might not influence
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in accessibility
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 in
first
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 place, these factors determine directly
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how poor people act before studying. Due to family setbacks, the great majority of class C and D kids are off of school,
thus
, they will not even have the chance to compete with others to be in a college.
Furthermore
, those ones who were not born with favourable money conditions and, even though, want to accomplish higher education status, have to face a society prejudgement, because of their bank account, which affluent individuals do not have to experience. In Brazil,
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 ten students already inside a private university, two have to resort to scholarships programs due to the lack of financial conditions to maintain the studying.
Moreover
, generally, unfortunate ones have to work aside with their courses to raise funds to pay the college bills, not studying exclusively as should happen.
Hence
, it shows that, in spite of the fact that
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 to university might be hard for both rich and poor people, it is harder clearly for underprivileged ones. To sum up, it is harder for people who do not relish
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a high monetary status to enter
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academy
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 than
afortunate
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fortunate
a fortunate
 individuals.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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