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In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Fast
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food
 chains are the most convenient store to order
food
. In other countries, it is noted to have a higher percentage of
people
 who suffered from
illnesses
 because of
this
. I certainly agree that government officials should put a higher
tax
in
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the
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fast
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food
 restaurants.
To begin
 with, fast
food
 stores are everywhere.
Although
 it is known that processed foods are unhealthy, majority of the
people
 still order
dish
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 from them.
For instance
, aside from being fastly prepared, it can be ordered at the
convenient
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 of your home.
This
 is one of the
reason
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 why there is an increasing number of
people
 who have
health
 problems and mostly morbid obesity.
Moreover
, most
of
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the processed foods have
an unhealthy ingredients
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unhealthy ingredients
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inorder
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 to
preserved
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it
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them
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 for a long period. When it cooked and started to ingest by
people
, all the preserved ingredients
is
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are
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 stacked in the body which cause obesity and other
illnesses
.
In addition
, due to
health
 reason, the government should impose a higher
tax
 on
this
 kind of
food
. For that, it may lessen the
health
 problems of the countries.
For example
, if
this
food
have
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high
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a high
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tax
, more
people
 will prefer to cook
food
 at home rather than buying at
fast
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fast-food
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food
 restaurants. Like in gulf countries, their government put high taxes
for
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fast
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food
 restaurants alone to decrease the obese population in their country.
Furthermore
,
illnesses
 will
be eliminate
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 by eating healthy and
home cooked
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home-cooked
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food
. In conclusion, eating too much process
food
 can bring
health
 issues to one's body due to preserved ingredients added. And I certainly agree that local officials should impose higher
tax
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in order
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inorder
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 to prevent
illnesses
to
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 the community.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart disease
  • health outcomes
  • healthcare costs
  • consumer behavior
  • socio-economic backgrounds
  • ethical implications
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies
  • regulations
  • nutritional content
  • healthier food options
  • government intervention
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