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Band 7.5

You are not happy with the course you are doing at college and would like to change to a different course. Write a letter to the college director requesting to change your course. You should include details about: • What course you are doing now • Why you are not satisfied with that course • What course you would like to change to

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Dear Mr/Ms. AcademicDirector, I am writing
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 letter to ask whether it can
be change
Change the verb form
change

It appears that the form of the verb change does not work with be in this sentence.

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 my course or not.
Currently
Add a comma
,Currently

It appears that you are missing a comma after the introductory phrase Currently. Consider adding a comma.

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 I am studying General English Program and I would like to transfer to an Academic IELTS program. I have a belief that the General English course is not irrelevant to me. From my perspective, it is for students who want to improve their social English while I am required Academic Ielts band 7.0 to be accepted for a master’s program at New York University. Unless I get
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Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 score in the beginner of the
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Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 year, I will lose my position for the lesson and will come back home. I understand that it can be hard to change
course
Fix the agreement mistake
courses

It seems that course may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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 in the middle of the semester;
however
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

,
this
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 is an urgent priority for me. I would be grateful as long as
i
Change the capitalization
I

The pronoun I should always be capitalized.

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 could discuss it directly with you. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours sincerely,

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