At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large no. of young adults compared with the no. of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is clear that, mostly in underdeveloped

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, the amount of young citizens surpasses the quantity of the old ones. I believe that represents a positive trend, considering the future, and in

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the evidence of the lack of support the political system has for citizens in general, since that the life expectancy is lower compared to developed

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means that, during their life, the

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of poor nations has not enough access to health facilities or basic conditions to sustain life quality. To illustrate, if the

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is larger in some

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than in

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others, probably it is because those higher groups had access to exams and medicines to prevent treatable illness. Unfortunately, the same is with food, which concerns

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the nutritional elements to improve

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immunity and actuate against any disease.

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, the presence of a large

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of young adults could signify a better chance to bust the economy.

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is because, at that age, they have more capacity to work,

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to take care of the elders.

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, it is common nowadays, adult people to bring their parents to live together with them.

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the grandparents could help take care of the children and the family coexist in

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system, compared with their childhood. In conclusion, the minor number of elder

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in underdeveloped

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is a clear result of global social injustice. In my view, the large number of young adults represent one of the possible solutions to combat

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harmful aspect of economic inequality.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large no. of young adults compared with the no. of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

Fully explain your ideas

Many FPTU students use their phones and laptops to play games during the English lessons. What problems does this cause? What can be done to solve this problem?

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