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Some high school students work part-time in addition to going to school. What are the advantages and disadvantages of high school students having part-time jobs? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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Many high
school
 students split their times between studying and working through part-time jobs.
This
 trend may have its own advantages as well as its disadvantages, which will be discussed in
this
 essay. In some countries, high
school
 students are permitted to work while studying.
This
 reality may enable them to experience a sense of
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responsibility
 for their time. That happens because having to manage
busy
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 schedule via working plus
school
 projects may be a good opportunity for some
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 since
school
 at that period of life tends to be extremely demanding in an attempt to
preparate
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prepare
 scholars to get into university.
Besides
,
other
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 benefit aspect is to get an early financial knowledge, which generates more commitment with handling money in terms of opting either to save it or spend it.
Nevertheless
, working part-time at the same time
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 studying has some noteworthy drawbacks. One of them may be the
lackness
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blackness
lacks
 of time to dedicate to
school
 activities during one of the most challenging periods for adolescents. Before going to university, the pressure over the
school
 subjects is definitely high and perhaps most of them may struggle to deal with a busy schedule. All the
responsabilities
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responsibilities
 may be really distressing for some, putting them
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 to mental health disorders. Given that, it is
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undoubtedly
 to shed some lights on the mental health issues, that commonly
occurres
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occurs
occurred
 in adolescents. All the overloaded and distressing days prevent them from living experiences
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with
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 lens. Different sorts of research have suggested that more and more teenagers have been suffering from a mental disorder due to the strenuous tasks performed
everyday
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,
such
 as Burnout, and trying to commit suicide.
Thus
, having the opportunity to work while studying may become a good advantage considering responsibilities and encouraging youth to use money.
However
, when it comes to mental health, the
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 overpressure alert us
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 importance of a more
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self-pace
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 life.
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